2014年6月10日火曜日

What Makes the Essay Strong?

I was lost making sentences to close my essay.
BUT I was amazed by Dan's lecture.
The conclusion paragraph is almost the summary of body paragraphs!!!!!
When I read Omiai essay, I could understand what I should write as the conclusion.
I want to rewrite the conclusion paragraph and make it strong!!!

Also, I thought that sufficient research is very important in developing the essay.
If the essay has lack of the evidence, it will not be good, wonderful, and beautiful.
Now, I was pointed out in the e-portfolio that my essay is lack of evidence or reason.
Similarly, the connection between the first sentence and the last sentence in each paragraph is very very important. I believe that the essay would be well-developed if there is a good connection between these two sentences at least.
Less than one week is left, so I will work hard!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
 

Reaction to the OMS article...

 As one of the themes in OMS, there is the theme, "There is Honor in Struggle, Defeat & Death". Santiago was struggling against defeat.
He could not catch fish for eighty-four days, but he never gave up though he is old.
Also, he was struggling with Marlin for three days.
I think he is a strong person.
I also thought that the nature is severe world.
Everything is not always going well.
Marlin remained only skeleton, Santiago and Marlin were the token of honor, brave of fighting with the shark.
I thought Santiago had a gender opinion, "Man is not made for defeat", however I felt his thought was powerful and fantastic!

2014年6月9日月曜日

the essence of presentation, 3Bs

I learned how to show the introduction of the book as a presentation.
the presentation that Dan showed was so clear. I am not good at this skill, so I will work hard!!!
3Bs
Background
Biography
Bias

In fact, I am hard to read OMS, because I read without thinking anything, just read, read, and read...
I want to look into about the author more, and read OMS with reminding of 3Bs so that I will be able to understand OMS clearer.

the life of Hemingway

 At first, I thought Hemingway was one of the greatest authors in the world. However, the article told me that he was not the greatest American writer. He created the preposterous and romantic literary myth. He was also an uncompromising, soulful artist.
he was not respected by the generations of writers, but they try to emulate him.
Most readers named excellent work than Hemingway’s, so he was not the greatest author.
However, after being published one of Hemingway’s most highly regarded novels, the short masterpiece, The Old Man and the Sea, his name was spread and remained the single most influential, most parodied, most prominent, most immense American author of the past 100 years.
I think Hemingway’s achievements were so great. Especially, The Old Man and the Sea was based on his character and experience. I want to read OMS deeply and his other novels.

Stoicism is the main theme of OMS. I am not good at understanding philosophy, but I understood this word by connecting stoic. Santiago could not fish for 84 days, but he did not give up though he was an old man. I think the component of stoicism is including this part.
I want to practice stoicism because I HAVE NOT FINISHED HOMEWORK YET.
I will work hard this week...

2014年6月2日月曜日

C W T


 I have not time to review fallacies perfectly. Even now, however, I cannot make sense of Hasty generalization, Post hoc and Begging the question. I assumed that I could understand all of the general concepts.
Hasty generalization means that it has no sufficient evidence and always includes one's bias, stereotype and experiences.
Post hoc means that sentences that seem related as cause and event are not really related, so it is not logical.
Begging the question means that it hides assumption,  so there is no main point in the essay.

Am I OK??????
If I am wrong, please comment, please!!!

There are so many fallacies...

I wrote about the class in May 28th,
   In the class, I learned there is the another way to collect the information of the essay, that is survey!
My essay does not need to survey now, but I want to use the survey as the method of looking into the topic deeply in the future.
  Also I learned many kinds of fallacies.
      Non-sequitur (I cannot pronounce "sequitur")
      Red herring
      Appeal to pity
      Bandwagon
      Ad hominem
      Sweeping generalization
      Reductive fallacy
      Hasty generalization
      Appeal to ignorance
      Appeal to authority
      Post hoc
      Either or
 It spent a lot of time to list up... There are fallacies that we should not commit in the essay. In my childhood, I was a habitual offender of committing Red herring. When I wrote a composition, I wrote the straight introduction and body components at first, however, in the end, I wrote meaningless sentences that had no connection with the previous part. My teachers often gave warnings against Red herring.  Now, I am always careful about Red herring.
 To avoid committing these fallacies, I think it is important for us to do peer reviewing whenever each of us complete writing paragraph.  I want to say effective comment to my peers, so I need to understand all of the fallacies now!!!!

Syllogism!!

 I wrote about the class in May 26th.

    First, I did not understand what is syllogisms at that time. I thought that the syllogism was a proper noun.
 A If the death penalty deterred murder, countries that used it would have fewer murders.
 B America uses the death penalty, but has many murders.
 C Therefore, the death penalty does not deter murder.

I  assumed that syllogism was to confirm that the connection of each sentence is good or not. However, my peer told me that syllogism meant "A is B, B is C. Therefore A is C", so to speak, deduction!! I think that it makes the essay or thesis clear. Even now I feel a little confused about verifying the syllogism, but I would like to write the essay with being conscious of it. Not, "would like to try writing...",
Keep going, just doing!!!!!